tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post4333540977906928428..comments2024-03-18T01:49:03.153-06:00Comments on Blood-Red Pencil: Writing Tips With a Touch of SnarkDanihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14471919576687777886noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-40317486304275984442019-07-30T11:23:24.050-06:002019-07-30T11:23:24.050-06:00Great post. Okay, Maryann, here's my feeble at...Great post. Okay, Maryann, here's my feeble attempt: Alan sat at the edge of the pool, and stared at his image in the water. He saw it. Yes, the reflected eyes showed his fear. He was afraid of swimming, but deeper, it was the sole image which bothered him the most as the other couples cavorted in the pool together. Author Bob Nailorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09307736243397066884noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-9829287575355710002019-07-30T09:23:16.851-06:002019-07-30T09:23:16.851-06:00"Perun bellowed his frustration, unable to sm..."Perun bellowed his frustration, unable to smite the offending feline at such close proximity without injuring himself, though his right hand went to the axe he wore on his belt. Vishnu, who had been standing nearby and witnessed the entire debaucle, drew his sword Nandaka and cut the beard so close to Alei's paws that the cat felt the flat of the blade and screeched in fear for his delicate toe beans."<br /><br />From The Chase for ChoronzonJaq D Hawkinshttp://jaqdhawkins.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-13466302273808439372019-07-30T05:26:41.044-06:002019-07-30T05:26:41.044-06:00A great post. Reblogged on Dragons Rule OK, but as...A great post. Reblogged on Dragons Rule OK, but as I have another post today, I've scheduled it for a later date.<br />Yes, I agree with Polly Iyer about just. Also 'seemed'. I've just finished a critique of a work by a talented young writer, but one for whom many things 'seemed'.Vivienne Sanghttp://aspholessaria.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-90342750238464370732019-07-20T11:23:56.852-06:002019-07-20T11:23:56.852-06:00Great post, Maryann, and just what I need as I'...Great post, Maryann, and just what I need as I'm almost finished with my mess of a book. Did I just write just?Polly Iyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05729656119287702191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-53253489503643557172019-07-18T16:11:35.828-06:002019-07-18T16:11:35.828-06:00Thanks for the added tip, Diana. The book mentione...Thanks for the added tip, Diana. The book mentioned in the post has really good suggestions for new and fresh ways of showing things like smirking so we aren't all using the same wordage. I think one key to a memorable read, at least for me, is finding those fresh descriptions and phrases. Maryannwriteshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09479027709233807149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-79520664502169399922019-07-18T16:09:34.100-06:002019-07-18T16:09:34.100-06:00Nice on, Pat. Thanks for stopping by.Nice on, Pat. Thanks for stopping by.Maryannwriteshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09479027709233807149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-54804978492971345722019-07-18T12:39:50.316-06:002019-07-18T12:39:50.316-06:00Please also do a repetitive word search. No more s...Please also do a repetitive word search. No more smirking or eyes traveling hither and yon. :) Diana Hurwitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18216220574149672733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-16134427089980539652019-07-18T08:20:22.525-06:002019-07-18T08:20:22.525-06:00How about: I tapped my forehead against the brick ...How about: I tapped my forehead against the brick wall over and over, while my three kids watched, their squabble forgotten for the moment.Patricia Stolteyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17192369425956406122noreply@blogger.com