tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post2209467892416089482..comments2024-03-28T10:41:26.999-06:00Comments on Blood-Red Pencil: Feelings...Danihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14471919576687777886noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-81635839377063029972009-03-31T10:24:00.000-06:002009-03-31T10:24:00.000-06:00"Anonymous, the POV was from another character loo..."Anonymous, the POV was from another character looking at Doc."<BR/><BR/>And if it hadn't been, would you consider "felt" acceptable?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-76938692755080920612009-03-30T17:52:00.000-06:002009-03-30T17:52:00.000-06:00Hi,I've just found your blog and I'm so glad I did...Hi,<BR/><BR/>I've just found your blog and I'm so glad I did. I enjoyed the article on FELT. Very good points and I'll keep it in mind while writing.<BR/><BR/>HawkHouston A.W. Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03122044716314070512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-45454913954684826242009-03-30T13:15:00.000-06:002009-03-30T13:15:00.000-06:00Good thoughts. Biggest problem I see writers makin...Good thoughts. Biggest problem I see writers making is, as anonymous pointed out, a POV slip. It's important to be clear who's the POV character at the beginning of the scene and then to convert those "feelings" into actions that give the feelings substance. I find, on first draft, I spend too much head time. Then the on revision, I have to go back and create tension, action and movement from the "invisible." It seems to me that this is a "fix in the second draft and beyond" problem"--but you definitely have to fix it.Gayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09308862059975983327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-19075383658773718902009-03-30T13:01:00.000-06:002009-03-30T13:01:00.000-06:00I never would have thought of "felt" as passive un...I never would have thought of "felt" as passive until you demonstrated. How do like that - a passive action verb. LOL.<BR/><BR/>Dani<BR/>http://blogbooktours.blogspot.comDanihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14471919576687777886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-3786543010110767052009-03-30T12:45:00.000-06:002009-03-30T12:45:00.000-06:00Anonymous, the POV was from another character look...Anonymous, the POV was from another character looking at Doc.<BR/><BR/>Mark, I think we overlook the problem in the Crais books because of the terrific plotting, pacing, and characterization. I just noted it in this latest because I had picked up that other in the book I was reading just before it and decided to do a blog about this topic. Otherwise, I usually just skim right past the usage. Just like I skim past Kellerman's penchant for detailed descriptions.<BR/><BR/>And Elle, I am so glad you found concrete help in this blog. I know that specific examples have always helped me in fixing a problem in my writing.Maryannwriteshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09479027709233807149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-8015771604087616442009-03-30T12:31:00.000-06:002009-03-30T12:31:00.000-06:00Interesting that I've read a lot of Robert Crais b...Interesting that I've read a lot of Robert Crais books and was listening to one in the car yesterday, but never noticed the overuse of "felt." Maybe the gods can get away with things us mortals can'tMark Troyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10746027017657987261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-27534002146142924072009-03-30T11:26:00.000-06:002009-03-30T11:26:00.000-06:00Good example. Also it's been brought home to me (...Good example. Also it's been brought home to me (being guilty as sin) that the use of 'he/she thought' are to be avoided as week and telling. it is generally enough to just take that bit out, the sentence will still make sense and the readers will understand that the character felt or knew or thought that thing, if you are in that character's pov.writtenwyrddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02280711822302493122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-15123482158194349012009-03-30T10:20:00.000-06:002009-03-30T10:20:00.000-06:00"Doc ran his hands over a face haggard with fatigu..."Doc ran his hands over a face haggard with fatigue. He looked like a man who had been on call for two days."<BR/><BR/>The problem here is a potential POV slip. If we are in Doc's mind, unless he's looking in a mirror, he cannot see what he looks like. He can only feel it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-35864894738289496562009-03-30T08:45:00.000-06:002009-03-30T08:45:00.000-06:00Good examples. They clearly give more information ...Good examples. They clearly give more information to the reader.<BR/><BR/>Helen Ginger<BR/>http://straightfromhel.blogspot.comHelen Gingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09794759602654727110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-36143277522681528932009-03-30T07:12:00.000-06:002009-03-30T07:12:00.000-06:00Show don't tell takes a bit more effort, but worth...Show don't tell takes a bit more effort, but worth the bother.<BR/><BR/>Morgan Mandel<BR/>http://morganmandel.blogspot.com<BR/>http://blogtalkradio.com/booksandblogsMorgan Mandelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10118929301591850918noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-47204118312830791382009-03-30T05:41:00.000-06:002009-03-30T05:41:00.000-06:00Thanks so much for the advice! I've often thought...Thanks so much for the advice! I've often thought I've used 'felt' much too often, but wasn't sure how to correct the problem. You've really given me some strategies for dealing with that problem.Elle Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06860508736854124153noreply@blogger.com