tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post7033842307986543503..comments2024-03-28T10:41:26.999-06:00Comments on Blood-Red Pencil: Deep POV: Three mistakes and how to fix them, Part IDanihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14471919576687777886noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-21663371779986866622010-06-20T14:25:25.524-06:002010-06-20T14:25:25.524-06:00thanks! now yellow-flagging those words nowthanks! now yellow-flagging those words nowEeleen Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15221723342556515161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-53917190258541234102010-06-18T08:36:23.112-06:002010-06-18T08:36:23.112-06:00What fantastic advice! I'll be looking for ye...What fantastic advice! I'll be looking for yellow-flag words now. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-62919372348918658122010-06-16T03:52:50.164-06:002010-06-16T03:52:50.164-06:00Kathryn, that's very helpful info. Now, I'...Kathryn, that's very helpful info. Now, I've to review my existing wip.<br /><br /><a href="http://steamydarcy.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow"> Really Angelic</a>Enid Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12248877161249788607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-82281677853568738512010-06-15T21:38:00.795-06:002010-06-15T21:38:00.795-06:00Thank you! I never caught that, but yet it is so ...Thank you! I never caught that, but yet it is so obvious! I am looking forward to revisiting this in my work.Rowan Spencehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13063629620416663699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-28513339119477892402010-06-15T17:51:50.681-06:002010-06-15T17:51:50.681-06:00Neat. I hadn't thought of this.Neat. I hadn't thought of this.Sheila Deethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13465615546936319164noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-30530794953812001772010-06-15T13:23:30.077-06:002010-06-15T13:23:30.077-06:00Wonderful way of explaining POV!Wonderful way of explaining POV!Heidiwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02593338979995203659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-29251468001285308532010-06-15T13:00:49.552-06:002010-06-15T13:00:49.552-06:00Such a helpful post, Kathryn. I had not realized t...Such a helpful post, Kathryn. I had not realized the impact of those "Yellow flag" words until you pointed them out. And I think JDuncan is so right about how we need to stop insulting the intelligence of readers by telling them everything.Maryannwriteshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09479027709233807149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-87073821231734937822010-06-15T08:36:04.291-06:002010-06-15T08:36:04.291-06:00I think this comes down to an addage the writers s...I think this comes down to an addage the writers should always live by. Readers are smart. It doesn't actually take much for them to get it when it comes to things going on in the story. Flag words to me, are a way of being redundant, you know, just in case the reader doesn't get what you're trying to say. Obviously, we shouldn't do that as writers, because readers do get it most of the time. As in the example you used, clothing that isn't yours is a pretty clear indication of something going on. This can be applied to virtually every aspect of a story. Readers are very good at filling in the blanks. You just have to give them the lead.JDuncanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00487305836910594252noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-3539894686619168242010-06-15T06:51:42.293-06:002010-06-15T06:51:42.293-06:00Excellent! Little things that make all the differe...Excellent! Little things that make all the difference.Candylandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08956196611348299424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-68543511809100925512010-06-15T06:38:51.592-06:002010-06-15T06:38:51.592-06:00Thanks, ladies! And Andrea: I LOVE the word "...Thanks, ladies! And Andrea: I LOVE the word "why"--mostly because I'm too stubborn to do something "just because" I was told to!<br /><br />Another great way to think about it is something like this: a woman's son just learned to drive and he's late coming home. The mother peeks out the window and sees people gathered up at the corner. She leaves the house and sees flashing lights; there's been an accident. She rushes to the scene. All she want to do is see for herself if it's her son, if he's all right--and this author wants to stand between her and the action to tell her about his perceptions of it. "I got here at 10:10. I noticed the slick road. I heard a screech and glanced up and saw a car." If the author had taken pains to establish deep POV, however, he could now kindly stand aside so the woman could get through and see what happened for herself. <br /><br />The analogy isn't perfect because the author is still coloring the woman's (reader's) perceptions of the scene--but the woman's desire to deck him so she can get past his intrusion on the scene is valid!Kathryn Crafthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08371458857187160425noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-9217073702489573172010-06-15T05:36:49.743-06:002010-06-15T05:36:49.743-06:00I'm with Jan!I'm with Jan!Lizahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16170701034715108039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-49384754616484313842010-06-15T05:15:31.627-06:002010-06-15T05:15:31.627-06:00This is totally brilliant - I am going to copy out...This is totally brilliant - I am going to copy out those yellow flag words and stick them on my computer right now. Thank you so much.Jan Morrisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01771180344305042855noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-78748825851207019902010-06-15T04:16:51.636-06:002010-06-15T04:16:51.636-06:00Thank you for the tips! Although I'm aware tha...Thank you for the tips! Although I'm aware that these words make the writing seem stilted, I hadn't thought about why.Andrea Mackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15250681746122381149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5704943052235281766.post-11876571401278255242010-06-15T04:06:09.243-06:002010-06-15T04:06:09.243-06:00I like the idea of the 'yellow flag' words...I like the idea of the 'yellow flag' words. You've really pointed out what my critters have been trying to tell me for awhile.<br /><br />Thanks!Shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00456068019298922261noreply@blogger.com