Example: one character acts as “interviewer,” asking questions to show interest in whatever the other character is saying. As each question is asked, the other character will go on for paragraphs, detailing back story and fully explaining situations. When read, this dialogue sounds unnatural because it’s not a “true” conversation; it’s a report for the reader. In revisions, it’s important to go through dialogue to ensure it reveals character, intensifies conflict, moves current story/scene forward, and/or has real purpose to the story as a whole. If the material you trim is pertinent to your story, find more organic places to incorporate it.
What issues do you see in dialogue?-----
Writing in 140 is my attempt to say something somewhat relevant about writing in 140 words or less.
FYI: A great tip post on effective dialogue can be found here at BRP by Susan Mary Malone, "5 Tips to Effective Dialogue."
Shon Bacon is an author, doctoral candidate, editor, and educator. She has published both academically and creatively while also interviewing women writers on her popular blog, ChickLitGurrl: high on LATTES & WRITING. In 2012, her second mystery, Into the Web and her short story "I Wanna Get Off Here" (in the short story collection, The Corner Cafe) were published. Her next release, Saying No to the Big O, was published in April 2013. You can learn more about Shon's writings at her website, and you can get information about her editorial services at CLG Entertainment. Currently, Shon is busy pursuing her Ph.D. in Technical Communication and Rhetoric at Texas Tech University ... and trying to find the time to WRITE.